Amina: Feeling Her Phenotype
“Yo, I had a Queen named Amina, height 5'7" Caramel-complected, body like heaven. Met her through the sister of my man Big Vince...Like some shit from out the flicks we been in love ever since.”
(Roots, Do You Want More?!!!??!-1995)
…The hostess smiled as if she knew what my intentions were. I smiled back at her to confirm her thoughts. As I walked towards the table I thought only of her. She is my ideal, Amina. Amina is a natural beauty. She’s a soul stirrer and a muse for men with poetic potential. Just like Black Thought I raised her high and hoped that she would give me the time of day and she obliged.
Her hair…
Amina’s hair reminded me of a Minnie Riperton album cover from back in the day. It was all natural…just juices and berries. She’s my perfect angel with natural curly kinks that drape over her chocolate glazed face and large brown eyes. Her lips, the lips that I longed to kiss appeared full and soft. They were beautifully formed and slightly glossed as she smiled at me. “Hello Saint,” she said softly as she stood up to greet me with a hug. It wasn’t the type of hug that auntie would give accompanied with a pat on the back either. No, she embraced me as our bodies merged and bubbled like hot liquid. Her subtle scent of vanilla and jasmine consumed me as I felt the curves of her size 8 that was the perfect fit for what I had in mind. Yes, at that moment it became sexual, but I pushed away before she could detect the swelling in my pants. Besides, I was wearing linen.
(Roots, Do You Want More?!!!??!-1995)
…The hostess smiled as if she knew what my intentions were. I smiled back at her to confirm her thoughts. As I walked towards the table I thought only of her. She is my ideal, Amina. Amina is a natural beauty. She’s a soul stirrer and a muse for men with poetic potential. Just like Black Thought I raised her high and hoped that she would give me the time of day and she obliged.
Her hair…
Amina’s hair reminded me of a Minnie Riperton album cover from back in the day. It was all natural…just juices and berries. She’s my perfect angel with natural curly kinks that drape over her chocolate glazed face and large brown eyes. Her lips, the lips that I longed to kiss appeared full and soft. They were beautifully formed and slightly glossed as she smiled at me. “Hello Saint,” she said softly as she stood up to greet me with a hug. It wasn’t the type of hug that auntie would give accompanied with a pat on the back either. No, she embraced me as our bodies merged and bubbled like hot liquid. Her subtle scent of vanilla and jasmine consumed me as I felt the curves of her size 8 that was the perfect fit for what I had in mind. Yes, at that moment it became sexual, but I pushed away before she could detect the swelling in my pants. Besides, I was wearing linen.
Comments
you brought back some memories when you mentioned Minnie Ripperton...Back Down Memory Lane started playing in the back of mind.
Excellent Writing!
I can't wait for your publication :)
"...placed my meninges on vibrate!!!!!!!"
Sounds freaky. :)Thanks babe.
the writer in me wants to fix up things & give you a long drawn out critique *slaps hand*, but i know this is an exercise. and for now...you should just concentrate on writing it all out. you have a lot of good things working here. i like the "Silent Treatment" and "Coming to America" refs. Juices & berries made me laugh *lol*...and i think you gave us a good visual refrence to look at (Minnie's album cover). but the chocolatey, etc, etc...has been done so many times. see...that is the writer in me again *lol* but you definitely have my attention. maybe you should keep it going? and not just for your friend, but for yourself?
Haa haa! I think that you are so great! I really like that about you. I welcome your critique. You can send it by email if you don't wish to post it. Thanks. :)
i would provide a crit...but i think it would be too early in the process. the whole point is to write. pour it all out there & then fix it up later. sometimes i end up sabotaging myself because i tend to edit as a i write, which makes me think TOO much, which leads me to a big ol block. so i don't want to do that to you *lol* besides...you have a lot of good things working here. when you are done writing, i will offer my crit. just let me know. :)
Did I describe her well? It's been a long time. Thanks. :)
Have a great weekend!
lol. Haa ha! :)Thank you. The size 8 was just a middle ground for a black woman. They are all beautiful from size 2 to 22. **wink** I'm glad that you like the writing though.
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Hey...we can't help ourselves. That's not funny! :) Thanks.
FYI - I sent my comments to your email (I want you to be aware because they might go into your Junk folder)- not because they were negative (quite the contrary) but, because they were to lengthy to post here.
Let me know what you think.